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The Much Awaited Soulmate.

August 4, 2009

This post is special in many ways. This is my first attempt at a short story in V-Lokam (and I hope it doesn’t end up being my last :D). This was also the first time I sent someone my post before publishing it here. The sweetheart that she is, not only read the stuff, but also came forward to edit it. She is none other than my arch rival Smita, the best book reviewer I have ever known !!! Thanks a lot Smita for all your help. (Btw, regarding that sweetheart and the best book reviewer part, she asked me to include those lines in return for her favour)

 

The Much Awaited Soulmate.

“Six more days to go, just six more days” yelled Prem to his fiancée, Meenaxi, on the phone. She giggled and said would call him later. Prem has never been this excited in his life before. It took almost 6 years for him to find the right girl. His weird conditions ensured that his parents had a tough time in searching the right bride for him.

He wanted his life partner to be an accommodating person, somebody with an interest in arts, and most importantly a positive attitude towards life. Good look’s was another important parameter for him and he felt that the only advantage of an arranged marriage was that he had an option to choose his bride by looks.

Prem was quite unlike his name; he has a sad past when it comes to relationships. It wasn’t that he never believed in the concept of love. He is a smart looking fellow with a decent personality. He was in a relationship during his college life; however it didn’t last long. The sad part was that he still has no clue as to why the girl broke up with him. After that incident Prem had few stints of one-sided love but one-sided they were. He used to feel he was jinxed! But at the back of his mind he knew the reason behind is bad luck.

 He had a major problem!!!

All his relationships with girls went beyond the level of friendship but unfortunately the next level would always be that of a brother, yes! All the girls that he had met in life saw him as a brotherly figure.

This trend continued right from his UG days & it has only strengthened over the years. He wasn’t sure if it was his persona or if it was his looks, the girls always saw him as a brother!

He was always surrounded by girls, and that made the other guys jealous of him but none of them knew what he was actually going through. Another disadvantage of the whole situation was that the guys would approach him to get in touch with the girls. And eventually, he became a faithful messenger & mediator to those girls who were once upon a time his crush.  Ironically Rakshabandhan was celebrated like another birthday of his!

His hopes that things would change in professional arena were thrashed because all that girls could see in him was a brotherly figure. And he continued playing the part of a cupid.

He slowly got used to this and stopped worrying about the fact that girls found him ‘harmless & felt comfortable around him’. His dry life however made his parents unhappy, they were worried about him. They were so worried that they took the extreme step of taking him to a psychiatrist to check if there was anything wrong with him.

Today after finding his soul mate he is a finally a happy man. Meenaxi lives in a different city; they have met only once that too on the day when he had gone with his parents to meet her for the first time. He had missed his own engagement as he was out of the country for an onsite project and their parents were in a real hurry to seal the deal.

The engagement marked the beginning of a long distance relationship which excited Prem because he believed in the saying, “distance keeps the heart go fonder.” The two of them started talking to each other regularly. The calls were however always made by Prem as he believed in male chivalry.

It has now been four months & he is head over heels in love with her. He wanted to meet her in their courtship phase but was always discouraged by Meenaxi. Though it disappointed him deep down his heart, he was happy with her shyness. He started enjoying her rejection because he loved her shy avatar and thus he kept asking to meet up. His attempt to get ‘real’ personal with her, were always dodged by her & she would always change the topic and her rejection excited him even more.

Finally, the d-day arrived. Prem was all around the place helping and greeting friends and relatives. He looked restless because wanted to talk to Meenaxi but couldn’t do so because of the huge crowd & the feeling of embarrassment, which kept creeping in. Most of his ‘sisters’ arrived for the wedding and he happily introduced them to Meenaxi.

After wrapping up all the rituals the newly wed couple was all set to retire for the day.

His friends and her brother led them to their room. The room was looking beautiful in the shimmering light of scented candles making the whole atmosphere very romantic. The ambience managed to charge up the already charged up Prem he had no traces of tiredness of the whole day.

As he lowered himself on the couch he requested Meenaxi to sit on the bed, as he wanted her to feel comfortable. He kept watching her and she kept looking down like one of those olden movie heroines in similar first night situations trying to act shy. His initial questions were answered with a ‘mmm’ or a ‘mm mmm’!

 He felt she was shy so he went near her and asked, “do you love me?” when Meenaxi remained mum he bent down on his knees, looked into her eyes and repeated the question. “Meenaxi, do you love me?”

She refused to look into his eyes. Prem, now totally impatient, wanted to take control of the situation; he slowly lifted her chin & repeated his question. This time, she was ready with a reply….

“Look Prem, I dunno how and why but whenever we speak or whenever you come near me I get this strange feeling. I feel so comfortable when you are around & I feel I can say anything to you but if you ask me to define what I really feel for you then I can only think of one thing. I see a brother in you!!! I really don’t know what to do and how to handle this, I hope you can help me.”

THE END!!!

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140 Comments leave one →
  1. August 5, 2009 12:23 am

    me first!! 😛

    (aah.. what joy to do it on YOUR blog too… esp since u shifted to WP 😛 )

    • August 5, 2009 1:39 am

      omg… i hope this is ur last attempt at this kind of fiction. i mean with terrible endings like this!! (thats only coz i believe in happy endings only…)

      Vim : There are no happy endings in reality my child !!! 😀 😀

      my heart goes out to Prem… u heartless beast (the writer in vimmuuu), why did u have to give prem that kind of a beginning to his married life…. that too when he was hoping for it so much??! and i feel like slapping meenaxi… if she thot of him that way then why did she agree to that marriage?? 😛 😛

      Vim :beginning to his married life ?? its over. The ‘The End’ at the end is an end to everything 😀 😀 😀

      alright…
      * me straights up after the outburst, looks around, composes herself and clears her throat* ahem!
      enuff drama for one comment… lol
      the narration is good… the twist in the end is good too 🙂 keep writing more fiction n u’ll get the hang of it better!

      Vim: after all that you have read there, you are still asking me to try, huh? Ok, you asked for it !!!

      just dont give me a shock like that again… i take some of ur writings too personally so hence diverse reactions 😛 hehe

      Vim : LOL, atleast someone is taking me seriously 😀 😀
      P.S.: now for the mean comment…! (see? i’m starting to take lessons from u! 😛 ) how much of this is inspired from real life??? 😀

      Vim : Prem is me. I am Prem !!! 😀 😀 😀

      • August 5, 2009 7:49 am

        lol I think this is his life story… 😛 Pavam koyandha..

        Vim : so, you got it, huh ? 😀

      • August 5, 2009 10:47 am

        There are no happy endings in reality
        married life is over?? there are no beginnings
        man, somebody is taking this really negatively 😛 😛

        if u r keeping these kind of expectations/hopes, i dont want to know where u r headed.
        hmm but i guess keeping ur expectations low is better than keeping them sky-high and getting disappointed!!

        Vim: LOL, anything that is followed by a smiley is supposed to be a joke.

      • August 5, 2009 11:24 am

        Prem is u?? :O:

        Vim :LOL, kinda !!!

  2. August 5, 2009 1:23 am

    Thats a heart break for that guy 😦
    nice one bro… 🙂 I loved the way the things are narrated and end is quite a shock
    and I am 2nd 😀

    • August 5, 2009 4:01 am

      LOL, we all like it when something tragic happens to a person in a comical way, na ? 😉

      • Swaram permalink
        August 6, 2009 4:05 pm

        We like it but wat abt the guy 😛

  3. August 5, 2009 1:25 am

    thank god I read the post before the riot began in comments section.
    “Good look’s ” should be good looks.
    “He looked restless because wanted to talk to Meenaxi” There is a he missing.
    LOL 😀 Bhaiyyaaaa!

    • August 5, 2009 4:02 am

      LOL, next time I write a post, after getting it edited, I will send it to you to do the spell check 😀 😀 😀

    • August 5, 2009 7:51 am

      oh so you don’t want to be a part of the riot? Hmm…then you better be first in these blogs 😛

      Dude that is a grammatical error not a spelling mistake 😛

  4. August 5, 2009 1:31 am

    Disappointing !!! Better Luck Next Time !!!

    • August 5, 2009 4:04 am

      Welcome to V-Lokam and thanks for dropping in your comment !

      and thanks for the feedback. I will definitely try for more such crap 😉 But seriously, what a post for you to enter here ! You should read the other posts of mine, I am sure you will quit blogging 😀 😀 😀

      Hope to see more of you here !

      • August 6, 2009 4:08 pm

        ROFL!!!! No one wil quit .. they will change their blogging ishtyle 8)

      • craftyshines permalink
        August 7, 2009 1:53 am

        You should read the other posts of mine, I am sure you will quit blogging

        ROFL!!!!
        hahahah

        yep……insanity prevails…its our world isn’t it vimmuuu??
        {{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}]

  5. rocky permalink
    August 5, 2009 2:14 am

    aa oru durbala nimishathil athu sambavichu poyallooo!! kastham thanne! Oh brother!!!
    ‘hearty condolences’ hehe!!

    • August 5, 2009 4:04 am

      Atleast you understand me bro !! Thanks a lot for all the words ! 😀

  6. August 5, 2009 4:16 am

    waah waah kya baat hai story n all huh…

    *scrolling back to read*

    • August 6, 2009 2:49 am

      You either didnt come back and read or you read it and felt really disgusted 😀 😀 😀

  7. August 5, 2009 5:58 am

    😯 😯 😯 😯

    Vimmuuu….. What an ending. I certainly feel bad for Prem. And want to feel like throttling Meenaxi. What a *****. How can she put a guy in such a situation? And why the hell did she marry him if she saw him as a brother?

    *Badz walks away shaking her head BUT befor she goes, she had one question to ask her dear friend Vimmuuu….*

    Vimmuuu…. Is Prem in the story REALLY you???

    • August 6, 2009 2:51 am

      LOL, dont worry, its just a story !!! I dont think there would be any girl who would do that to anyone 😀 😀 😀

      and that last question…kinda, experience speaks you see !! 😀 😀

      • August 6, 2009 4:10 am

        Yes. Some things I am aware of from speaking to you BUT…… 😉

  8. August 5, 2009 6:27 am

    Will there be a sequel too?

    People here are cursing me for writing this. You want a sequel too ?? 😀

    • August 5, 2009 9:16 am

      Gosh!!! hilarious but so sad!!!

      But yes in Ahmedabad I have seen this, aunty se poocho uncle kahan hai then she will say bhai bahar gaya hai 😀

      • August 5, 2009 9:18 am

        The above comment was my reply to Ava’s comment and it appeared here??? WP sucks!!! when are u moving back to blogger 😀

        Vim : WP doesnt suck ! You are a confused soul, thats why !

        And sweetheart???? Me??? ha ha ha ha…..

        Vim: You asked me to include that, rt?

      • August 6, 2009 8:18 am

        Its not bhai bahar gaya hai… aapke bhai bahar gaye hai… tat sort…

    • August 6, 2009 11:37 am

      Oh yes!!!

      • August 6, 2009 11:42 am

        Gosh! WP is soooo confusing!! The above Oh yes is for “Yes I want a sequel :P”

        And as far as me asking u to write sweetheart et al. Gosh!!! What all people do for publicity 😛 and u urself know what I had said 😛 karo Sacch Ka Samna buddy 😛

    • craftyshines permalink
      August 7, 2009 1:58 am

      people are cursing u for writing this???

      aha!!!! point them out to crafty vimmuuu……

      *vimmuuu makes list while crafty sips coffee n rolls sleeves*

  9. August 5, 2009 7:57 am

    Dude I kinda understand this man 😛 *sigh

    So you scared of getting married and that they girl finally calls you a brother?

    You know this me about the “All Indians are my brothers and sisters” joke…

    You know wanting to marry a foreigner and all 😛

    I liked it the story…oru rendu patu add panikurkalaamei?

    • August 6, 2009 2:55 am

      Dude, I should be sending this comment of yours to Reema 😀 😀 😀

      honestly, I am a little scared 😀 😀 😀

      I guess Rajiv Gandhi is one of those few Indians who actually followed that All Indians policy !

      Oh, yeah I should have added two songs !! Hmm…may be next time !

      • August 6, 2009 2:21 pm

        There is a next time!!!!! Don’t get someone else to call him bro too nw 😐

        Vim : LOL, no. I meant in my next short story. Oh yeah, there will be more 😀 😀

  10. August 5, 2009 8:20 am

    The eternal brother !

    There is a gujju story that way. Feeding on the gujju tendency of calling everyone Ben. A guy got married as a child, when he grew up he went to fetch his bride. On the outskirts of his village, he went to the well and saw a woman there. He said – Can I have a drink of water, Sister? The woman lifted her veil and poured some water for him out of her matka. When he got to his in-laws house, they were thrilled and set him up with his wife in a nice room, after dining and wining him. Alas, when he lifted the veil, he saw it was the same girl he had called Ben at the well. So he couldnt ahem.. you know, his SISTER.

    So a few years passed, and the parents grew restless because there was no child. They decided to marry the boy again. When the doli was about to depart, his father-in-law appeared with his hands folded. “Please treat her like you treated your first wife”. Poor guy, He couldnt do unto her what he didnt do to the other one.

    • August 5, 2009 9:46 am

      ROFL.. loved that story!!!!

    • August 5, 2009 12:21 pm

      ouch!!! the poor guy!!

    • August 6, 2009 2:57 am

      Oh good god, and I thought Prem was the only pathetic soul left on planet earth ! 😀 😀 😀

      Thanks for sharing it here Ava !

    • August 7, 2009 11:49 am

      Thats a twist in the twist kind. Poor man ! Having 2 wives, but treating them as sisters – What a tragedy !!!

      Kalyanam panniyum bramhachari kind !!!

  11. August 5, 2009 8:31 am

    Comments are more interesting than the story, you look more energetic there 🙂
    Minaxi rocks!!! What a loser Prem is 😀

  12. August 5, 2009 9:38 am

    😛 😛 thot of commenting smethng else..bt deleted it 😛 waiting for mallu guys to respond to ths..if ths seriously is ur situatn ..u can go consult them!! 😀 hope eby doesnt ctch in chat aftr me telling ths plight of urs 😛 :p ROFL ROFL!!!
    nd hey..can u try the song ‘kankal irandaal’ from subrahmanyapuram in ur v-mphony?? i knw wrong place & :(time) to ask ths..bt seriously..can u try that song?

    • August 6, 2009 3:03 am

      LOL, Cmon, come out with it !!! I need to know what you actually wanted to write !!! 😀 😀 😀

      I really wanna try that song, I need a karaoke track and also a female voice to try it out. Tried creating a karaoke myself, it didnt work !

  13. August 5, 2009 9:45 am

    Ha..ha..ha..ha..ha..ha..

    Gosh!

    “Rakshabandhan was celebrated like another birthday of his!”

    It reminded me of our school when we used to tie rakhi to no-so-good-looking-guys. Now I feel bad. Poor guys!

  14. August 5, 2009 9:46 am

    btw…cant help saying it…esp when ths post coincides with th date.. Happy Raksha Bandhan 🙂

  15. August 5, 2009 9:48 am

    Vimmy, but you are a good story teller. I thought the girl would say,

    ““Look Prem, I dunno how and why but whenever we speak or whenever you come near me I get this strange feeling… YOU SMELL” 😆

  16. shraddha permalink
    August 5, 2009 9:51 am

    good job…

  17. August 5, 2009 11:05 am

    ROFL :)…..dude that was superb…..ingene oru climax expect cheythethe illa 😀 …feel sorry about him,poor guy 🙂
    First i thought it was a autobiography,then it was like a sooraj barjatya movie…
    nyways i have only one word to describe this story…kidilan
    എന്നാലും ആ നിമിഷം തന്നെ അവള്‍ അതു പറഞുവലൊ പാവം ചെക്കന്‍ 😦
    i guess he should see ‘kismoth connection’

    P.S : waiting for the sequel :)……

    • August 5, 2009 12:22 pm

      sooraj barjatya movie?? kismoth konnection? ROFL 😀

      • August 5, 2009 12:51 pm

        @ sooraj barjatya—- watch vivah , Ek Vivah Aisa Bhi or any of his old movies, then you will get my point(the theme of his most of the movies are ‘love between ‘prem’ and his shy girl friend’…….in between,i willn’t be responsible for the aftereffects occur, after watching those movies 🙂 )

        @ Kismoth connection——do i need explain that lol 🙂

    • August 6, 2009 3:12 am

      LOL, it could happen to anyone dude. You never know these women ! So beware !! 😀 😀

      No sequel. thats it. Prems life is over !!!

      Btw, now even I feel, barring the dozen songs, this did have a feel of Sooraj movies !!! 😀 😀

      • August 6, 2009 4:17 pm

        Vimmuuu, so very experienced!!!!!! Hw much time did u spend hunting 😉

  18. August 5, 2009 11:10 am

    in between did you get Ritu(malyalam) songs…check it out,that album has some good tracks

  19. August 5, 2009 11:28 am

    Vimmuuu, no songs in b/w for some more effect 😉

    What sort of an ending ws that dude 😦 Ws thinking its gonna b ur luv story n ws hooked to it!

    She called him Bhaiyya toooooo??? I hate this Meenu 😦 Y cudn’t she tell him b4 then!

    • August 6, 2009 3:39 am

      No songs, but I should ve put some ! 😀 😀

      My love story ??? LOL, you mean my arranged love story, rt? I hope it doesnt end up this way ! you never know, some of my posts have become jinxed ! 😀 😀

      awww, you hate her and still gave her a nickname !!! 😀 😀 😀

  20. August 5, 2009 11:29 am

    Vimmuuu, is Meenaxi gng to tie Rakhi today too 😛

  21. August 5, 2009 12:46 pm

    😀
    This actually happened to someone i know but luckily it happened before the engagement 😉 Now the guy is happily married and has a son too!
    So Koi na Koi will arrive for poor Prem.
    BTW from where did you dig the name Prem? Dont tell me its Sallu effect

    • August 6, 2009 3:37 am

      OM good G , dont tell me !!! this happened ?????? I dont know if I should be happy or sad now !!! 😀 😀 😀

      Yup, the name Prem is inspired from our Sallu 😀

  22. Mystery permalink
    August 5, 2009 12:47 pm

    Nice story but sad ending…
    waiting for more of such stories 🙂

    • August 6, 2009 3:36 am

      waiting for such stories? you mean sad ending ones ??? 😉

  23. August 5, 2009 1:40 pm

    Troubling! is this a real narrative……… somehow, I felt so, reading it! Pardon my interpretation!!!!!

    • August 6, 2009 3:35 am

      LOL, kinda Rakesh !! 😀 😀 😀 You are the only person who felt for Prem I guess 😉

  24. August 5, 2009 2:05 pm

    Oh goodness! I had a feeling this would end this way – and it did!!! I was sure Meenaxi would pop out a Rakhi 🙂

    Very well written though! I was dying to know how it was going to end 🙂 And you know what, I used to know somebody like this – he would know the moment a new girl entered our office and inevitably, she would end up calling him ‘Bhaiya’ 🙂 But he did get married eventually -so I guess there is hope for Prem yet 😉

    • August 6, 2009 3:34 am

      hehehe. I should have done that, le ! Chey !!! she should have actually handed him a rakhi and asked him to tie that !!! 😀 😀 😀

      So there are people like me…errr..Prem in this world !! good to know !! So I …err not again…Prem can still hope 😉

      • August 6, 2009 11:35 am

        height of exaggeration! give poor Prem a break, will ya! 😛

        Vim : 😀 😀

      • August 6, 2009 4:20 pm

        Some Prem hs to drop by this blog nw 😉 😉

  25. August 5, 2009 3:18 pm

    man…i went all excited…and lo..poor guy…
    im just wondering,does it really happen to people in real life?
    man!!!!!
    waise its a perfect rakhshabandhan post:D:D:D

    what happened to Prem eventually?did he go mad or something?
    lovely story i must say:)

    • August 6, 2009 3:33 am

      LOL, I really dont think this would happen in real life. and if it happened, Im sure Prem wouldve gone crazy !! 😀 😀 Poor fella !!!

      Thanks !

  26. soneeta permalink
    August 5, 2009 4:07 pm

    vimal will always be vimal!! when everything is going good its time to realise that you are on the wrong track.same with his posts.when everything looks so normal there will be a blast at the end.
    and ya…prem and meenaxi..nice name

  27. August 5, 2009 5:51 pm

    this is sad.. poor Vimmuuu.. err.. sorry Prem.. 😉
    but this does not make sense why would the girl go on with the wedding then..?
    but i loved the way you have written it. 🙂

    • August 6, 2009 3:31 am

      LOL, it doesnt make sense, huh? ok, now i consider myself a successful story writer !! 😀 😀 😀

      Thanks !

  28. August 5, 2009 6:04 pm

    LOL! Please. Do not write short stories again., please! 😀
    Vaayichu thudangunnenu mumbe thonni…Prem would be you, ennu 😛
    Good luck! Pennukaanal-inu don’t tell the girl you blog. Why give her ideas, eh? 😛 😛 😛

    And yea, its “distance makes the heart grow fonder.” 😉

    • August 6, 2009 3:30 am

      LOL, I will try not to 😀 😀 😀

      oh yeah? aduthu irunnu madutho ??? 😀 😀 😀

      • August 6, 2009 8:28 pm

        What? aduthirunno maduthonno? i was correcting you, mister PREM !! 😛

  29. August 5, 2009 10:36 pm

    oye! what is this?!!

    I come here after 2 days break, and see this?!!

    What an ending!!
    But, you have written it well…
    The ending is quite a twist! 🙂 🙂

  30. August 5, 2009 11:54 pm

    btw, yeh prem ka character Salman jaisa lagtaa hai… ladkiyaan aati hai, magar rukti nahi 😀

  31. August 6, 2009 12:48 am

    I really hope such ‘tragic’ comedy dont happen in the author’s real life…
    hehhehee…
    u gone carzy or wat ?:P

    • August 6, 2009 3:25 am

      LOL 😀 😀 😀 life is all about such tragic comedies !! 😉

  32. revsjoiedevivre permalink
    August 6, 2009 2:22 am

    Meena’x’i eh? (You mean ‘x’ instead of ‘ksh’!!) Ahem 😛 Naan onnum sollala pa!

  33. August 6, 2009 8:20 am

    What was this post about ???

    do you expect me to say the only word i know in mallue ??

    Kidilaan ?? huh ??

    Rakshabandhan is playing heavy on the minds of us guys… !!!!!

    chill dude… take a vacation !!!!!!! lol 😛 😛

    main to chala… !!!!!!

    • August 6, 2009 3:30 pm

      LOL…do we actually mean by any of our posts??? 😀 😀 😀

      yeah, thats the right word, but I am not sure if this is the right post for that. LOL 😀 😀 😀

      you always take vacations during frienship days and rakshabandhans or what??? 😉

  34. August 6, 2009 9:04 am

    Here through Smita’s post. Such an anti-climax and so much like a bad movie…where the movie ends and you want to talk to the Director screenwriter, story writer someone anyone and ask WHAAAAAT!WHY?HOW COME? COULD YOU PLEASE EXPLAIN!
    If that was intentional the story was very funny!:)

    • August 6, 2009 3:36 pm

      Welcome to V-Lokam and thanks for dropping in your comment !!!

      I know, if this was made into a movie, it would not even run for a full day !!!

      Well, the anti climax was intentional buddy. You are feeling this way because this is your first visit. I write only such kinda crap and I knows its hi-time the different blog domains took an action against me !!! 😀 😀 😀

  35. August 6, 2009 10:31 am

    ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! aliyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa 😛 classic!!!!!!

    I have actually known a few character like this in my life…..
    I have a frd called “ABC” code name offcourse…… he was just like the char in the story!!! 😛

    he helped with many rels and is still single…….

    sorry that I am late dost 😛 was busy 😛

    • August 6, 2009 3:39 pm

      LOL, Then, I dedicate this post to him and all the souls who are just like Prem !!! 😀 😀 😀

      Btw, I would want to meet that friend of yours. Who knows! We could be twins !!! 😉

      Hellonn, are you coming here for the first time. Why all this sorry chorry ???? Aliyaaaa…what happened??? its me !!! 😀 😀

    • Swaram permalink
      August 6, 2009 4:01 pm

      Ahem … OG I seriously think u r busy hunting for Ms.Z 😛

      • August 6, 2009 9:10 pm

        make that a confereence……………… 😛 😛 😛 not “Z hunting”………..

      • August 6, 2009 9:42 pm

        Who knows OG might come back from his ‘conference’ and announce that he is engaged 🙂 With all his prep – first house keeping skills and then sambhar 🙂

  36. minticetea permalink
    August 6, 2009 2:04 pm

    OMG… i still can’t stop laughing…. since the begining i knew that its not gonna be another ‘normal couple’ story for sure… (that’s why its a story )… and was guessing that may be she is in love with someone else (too predictable )… may be she is lesbian ( its quite possible these days 😛 ) …. may be she is not shy at all and will shock him by saying something really bold …. may be she is so shy that she just want let him come close to her… and few more… but some how never thought of the word ‘brother’ 😛
    Poor Prem ;D

    • August 6, 2009 3:47 pm

      Welcome to V-Lokam and thanks for dropping in your comment !!!

      So you knew there was something stupid coming up, huh? 😀 😀 😀 Now, atleast thats predictable !!! That lesbian angle is actually too good. I can imagine Prem walking like Ross (of FRIENDS sitcom) and telling people that his wife is a lesbian and he is not !! 😀 😀 😀

      What else can you expect on Rakshabandhan other than a ‘brother’?? 😀 😀 😀 and you are feeling bad for Prem; but I am sure even you will make him your brother 😀 😀

      • August 6, 2009 3:53 pm

        Hehehe…sure…would love to meet him 😛

        Vim : Run, Prem, Run !!! 😀 😀 😀

  37. August 6, 2009 2:14 pm

    testing yet again

    • August 6, 2009 3:49 pm

      What on earth are you testing now???

      • August 6, 2009 7:16 pm

        grrr!! i was trying to figure out how to enable ‘Bath tub’ chat!! 😀

        jokes apart i was just testing how to add the link to this gravataar thingy.

  38. August 6, 2009 3:53 pm

    ROFL ..and what a corny and careful pick of name….”Prem”.. I also knew quite a bunch of those brother figures…but none like “Prem”.. 😀

    • August 6, 2009 4:20 pm

      😀 😀 You knew a few Prems?? or you all created a few Prems??? 😀 😀 😀

      • August 11, 2009 12:20 pm

        Such “Prems” get created on their own..with or without effort 😛

        And Vims…everybody is demanding a sequel (includes me)..think think think…

      • August 12, 2009 4:17 am

        LOL, let me! let me! let me ! 😀 😀 😀

  39. August 6, 2009 9:13 pm

    What a sad ending !!!! But I think it suits the story !!!

    I am always a lover of happy romantic stories especially with happy endings.

    Very gud attempt at ur short story stint. Since, your imaginative head has been at the top after the Cross Border trials, we can expect more from you, of this sort, right ???

    • August 7, 2009 12:07 am

      Sad ??? 😀 😀 😀

      Who doesnt like happy endings? but thats not how life treats us, rt? 😉

      LOL, its not after the Cross Border trials, I have always been this crazy 😀 😀 😀

  40. craftyshines permalink
    August 7, 2009 2:11 am

    its a well narrated story! me liked…. 😀
    hug to smita! she does do some awesome book reviews na?

    Vim : Yeah, yeah, dont praise her too much !! She is already flying high with the kind of publicity Im giving her !!!

    raksha bandhan was celebrated like his bday???!ROFL

    Vim : It really was ! 😀 😀

    hmm….vimmuuu….. prem is u? u know, did u ever sing to these brother-making gals??? sung any romantic song???

    after listening to ur voice, only a dimwit will want you as her bro!!!

    Vim : Iam sure, 99% of the girls here would also want to make me their brother 😀 😀 No use Crafty, no use !

    yes, yes, gushing crafty is back!!!!!! 😛 gee…those sons of urs, ur voice….i have lost the will to tease u!!!

    what is many girl’s loss is one lucky gal’s gain! 😀

    luvya! (NOT as bro 😛 )

    Vim : LOL, seriously??? No ones seeing this??? Hellooo??? Anyone here??? Shit, no ones here to read that !!! 😀 😀 😀

    hugs!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! n best of luck for the future!!! keep sharp look out for Rakhis!!! 😀 😀 😀

    Vim : I dont have to look out for them. They come in search of me 😀 😀 😀

  41. August 7, 2009 11:10 am

    O BOY!!! 😆 A brother??? 😯 You have some imagination vimal!! And i hope this is not your last attempt at short story! 🙂 🙂

  42. August 8, 2009 3:45 am

    WHat???only you could think of such an ending you crazy person? 😛
    why oh why! did it have to end like this? 😀
    I was sitting comfortably hoping for a romantic ending 😀
    (yes I know silly me! knowing you and your imagination I should ever have even hoped!)

    she thinks of him a like a brother?
    do you know how many guys went ouch on reading this? 😉

    😆

    most of em 😀

    now go and write one mushy sappy post 😀 all romance and moonbeams and happy endings 😀

    can you? 😛 😛
    come on! you can get ‘prerna’ from your sweetheart 😀

    PS: yes I agree Smita is a sweetheart 🙂

    • August 12, 2009 4:23 am

      Romance from me !! Silly you !! 😀 😀

      You know how many guys go ouch when you girls call them brother ??? Think about it. LOL 😀 😀 😀

      Please, no mushy and sappy from me !!! 😉

  43. August 8, 2009 3:33 pm

    Why do I have a feeling that this story reflects your fears? 😛
    Terrible terrible story!
    You just ruined that guy’s life! Now write a steamy sequel and make it a romantic happy ending. 😛

    • August 12, 2009 4:25 am

      You hit on the right spot, buddy ! This is my worst fear !!!

      LOL, I ruined his life??? LOL. He has to find another person if I need to make a happy ending !! 😀 😀 What about hooking him up with her sister??? 😉

  44. August 8, 2009 4:07 pm

    Maybe it is like the ‘Yen Na’ type of addressing in the Bhramin community, where the wives call their husbands ‘chellama’ like that!

    Destination Infinity

    • August 12, 2009 4:26 am

      Nahhh, that didnt happen to me..I mean, Prem ! 😀 😀 😀

  45. Pal permalink
    August 8, 2009 6:53 pm

    I think its a very good attempt at writing ‘fiction’ (and fiction it is, I hope). You could do with more tweaking, and restricting the narrative to either past or present tense and not mixing the two. I do feel sorry for the poor guy. How unfair! And how could Meenaxi think of her husband-to-be as a brother? I don’t think that’s possible for any girl.

    • August 12, 2009 4:27 am

      LOL, it is supposed to be a combination of facts and fiction ! 😀 😀 Thanks for the suggestions. I really need them !!

      Dont worry, it is possible !! I have never been able to understand women ! 😀

  46. August 11, 2009 7:06 pm

    wow… what an end…. enjyed readin it … She sees a brotherly figure in him on their first night… lol… cant stop laughing at the poor soul….I had heard about a saying (delete it if it sounds too vulgur to be on a blog) ” Din mai bhaiya raat mai saiyaa” but here even in raat he seems a bhaiya…

    Did u say it is ur first attempt??? doesnt look like one… way to go…

    • August 12, 2009 4:29 am

      Welcome to V-Lokam and thanks for dropping in your comment !

      Please go through the comment policy before you read any further!!! Did you go?? No?? Go, go and read the rest !

      LOL, you can write anything here buddy ! As long as…you know…

      Thanks a lot. Now that you have mentioned it, get ready for more ! 😀 😀

  47. August 14, 2009 10:40 pm

    Story proves that you are a sadist. 😉 You not only didn’t let poor guy have his own wedding night in peace, but also put a question mark on his future. 😛

  48. Nithya Shriram permalink
    August 18, 2009 9:45 am

    Ohhhhhhhh man .. r u serious..shooot i never expected such a thing
    and if you referring to u ,i mean the character ( * are you like serious *) coz u r like this really smart chap 😛 lol

    And yea this is my first comment for ur blog.. will read a few more though, well before I forget i happened to watch ur dedication bday for your friend .Sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet 🙂

    • August 19, 2009 1:49 am

      Welcome to V-Lokam and thanks for dropping in your comment !!!

      LOL, what to do !! probably, the girls wanted a ”really smart chap” kinda brother for a change 😀 😀 😀

      Thanks a lot! I did see your comment on the video !! i just wanted to know how you landed up there 😀 😀 😀

      See ya around !!!

      • Nithya Shriram permalink
        August 22, 2009 11:06 am

        Huhh dont ask me , well i wa watching some random video in a random website and it had some related videos , one of which was the song that you sang on raaga malika .. subequently i ended all the videos u downloaded and finally found that sweett video for your friend 🙂

        yea sure , i will be here
        And yea congrats for ur engagement

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